A Bionicle Tale

My 8-year-old son Ian is destined for a career in writing. Behold his latest work. My only input was on some capitalization. Everything else is his, including drop-capital and word emphasis. I might add that this is a work in progress, and he's greedy for any spare lap-top time to work on it.

For the uninitiated, Bionicles are fantasy creatures from the Lego Universe, complete with online games, comics, books and an extensive back-story to drive sales.

uparu activated his laser drill. A red laser shot from the weapon,  and he slammed the drill into the bumpy rock face in front of him. Two drops of sweat the size of small pebbles fell off a spike on his mask and hit the cavern floor with a splash.The drill turned around and around at terrific speed. Oh, why Jaller, why do you have to make us miss literally hours of sleep, Nuparu thought, all  because of some shrimpy little Matoran’s coaxing, he added to his thoughts. Jaller had been coaxed by a group of native Matoran that had reported freaky invaders trying to convince the Voya Nui Matoran that they were  “Toa”. So far they were successful; but when it came to Garan and his team, Balta, Velika, Dalu, Piruk , and Kazi it  went over the edge of a cliff; not long after the canisters washed up on the beach the team suspected that the “Toa”-a voice interrupted his thoughts: “hey what are ya doing?-hey ow!” “Those pebbles sting!” Nuparu’s drill was sending a barrage of pebbles flying everywhere. He turned and looked to see Hewki standing a few feet away with his hands on his hips. The drill-bearing Toa of earth looked Hewki straight in the eye and said coldly: “says the Toa who controls stone-which means also pebbles.” “wow!” said Hewki, embarrassed. “I can’t believe I never thought of that” “well”, said Nuparu, “would you mind sneaking me a hand here”? “not at all!” said Hewki, “you know I like the rocks, and this place is a cavern” “plus, if these new guys the ol’fire ball sent us after are meaner than we think, there will be two of us” “good point” said Nuparu, even as his laser drill made a huge chunk of rock the same black shade of his armor topple out of the boulder and smash on the floor. Hewki lifted his laser axe up over his shoulder, activated the laser, and brought down with a smash. Chunks of rock flew everywhere. A smallish hole had been formed in the rock from the brute force of the impact, the laser buzzing on and from the axe, and the fact that Nuparu had been working on it before. “Here’s where I take over” said Hewki. . . .